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The qualities that help people reach success in modern life cannot be learned in university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The Learning process at university or
school
 is a worthwhile experience for everyone,
moreover
, it is not a place to learn everything in detail. The process of being successful in
life
 varies from education at
school
 or university. No one can pull you up to these valuable things to be learned but the experience.
That is
 why everybody always says the
school
 experience is expensive for everyone and it does not have any return button so we should respect other's backgrounds to prevent failure during our
life
. On the one side, all educations at
school
 are necessary for a student's future
life
 and for that,
this
 is the period that should be passed for every pupil.
Firstly
, these
lessons
 are just for science and science is not about spirituality or some criteria of the past
life
 in which it is impossible to teach these subjects at
school
. Parents have duties for their children to do. Some of them are spiritual and some are material. Spiritual
lessons
 are more vital and despite the deep recognition that parents have of their children the effects of these teaching for future succession are crucial.
Last
 but not least, if teachers at
school
 try to teach some unscientific
lessons
 at
school
 the main theme of the
lessons
 will be lost. On the other side, teachers and
school
 employees should know their duties and part of them are related to identifying students' talents and nurturing them. Guidance for reaching success is part of these jobs and absolutely possible to do
besides
 their innate jobs. To sum up, there are lots of criteria to reach success which least of them being taught at
school
 and university campuses.
However
, some of these criteria does not related to these
lessons
 and should be taught by their parents and all of
this
 education will bring success in their future
life
.
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