These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine,rather than by following a healthy lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In recent times, the need to take care of one's
health
is an issue all over the world. Nowadays, it is believed by some
that trusting Correct quantifier usage
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on
physicians and medicine to keep Change preposition
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people
healthy is a better choice than pursuing a healthy lifestyle. It is undoubtedly true, through science
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the science
people
would have to spend more money
, consumed too many medicinal drugs, and wait until they get ill in order to have their health
back.
Firstly
, people
, of course, need to cost huge
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a huge
sum
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sums
money
so that they can find a medical way to whether
ease their pain or treat their sickness. Correct word choice
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For instance
, a patient has to obviously look for expensive drugs to find a remedy for the physical or mental discomfort. As a result
, much more money
will be spent to alleviate one’s health
.
Secondly
, using tablets is a double-edged sword. Although
using them might be beneficial in some circumstances, it
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they
also
have irreversible side effects on humans’
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body
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bodies
For example
, a study on long-term pain management found that alternatives to drug therapy, such
as cognitive behavioral
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an
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and
Consequently
, by eating too many drugs, people
will put their health
into
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a
potential danger.
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Lastly
, awaiting for a health
problem to come might cost a person’s life. Take diabetic people
, for example
, they are more inclined to vicious symptoms like confusion and even coma if they wait until the last
minutes
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minute
Therefore
, the sooner they deal with the illness the better outcome will be achieved.
To sum up, people
will lose huge
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a huge
money
, allocates too many medications, and more importantly lose their health
in general. So, it is in
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the
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people
more than that of
relying on medicine and doctors.Change preposition
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