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e-Books are completely taking over paper-based books. University libraries should focus on e-books only instead of paper-based books. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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The
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 current era,the advent of technology plays a huge role in the world .Especially, the education sector gives priority
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e-
books
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 rather than paper-based
books
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 college libraries
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 need to focus on digitalized
books
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 because it is easy to access.
The technology
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have
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 some benefits and demerits so let us discuss them in
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To begin
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 with, in Past decades we completely focused on paper-based
books
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 at that
time
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 we don't have
this
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 much technological development so we got
books
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 from
a particular shops
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 and we had to spend money and
time
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.nowadays, it is all under our palms if we need any
books
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 will get them from the internet there is no cost
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 our
time
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 will be saved.Digital
books
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 are easy to refer why because there is a search keyword it is used to access the whole book but we have to turn all the pages to get particular data in paper-based
books
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.
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, a data science book contains 550 pages and is tough to carry anywhere but an e-book is easy to carry and will have
an
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 option to highlight the keywords . most of the university libraries located in huge buildings have a lot of
partition
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 for storing
books
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 and students face difficulties finding their
books
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 display rocks will help to get their needs but they are wasted their
time
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.
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, if libraries will be changed to
e-library
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 students get their
books
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 without any difficulty which will save maintenance costs for the library .
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, students spend a lot of
time
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 on the screen which will affect their mental health and it is a bit difficult to revise particular parts of the book .Screen brightness will create eye irritation so we cannot focus longtime for reading e-
books
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,in 2018 one survey reported , those who used digital screens long
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it
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will reduce their eye power and
created
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 stress in the body. To sum up, Technology help to ease our needs mainly in reading
books
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 financially and physically but we
tohave
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have
 know our usage limits and need to take care of our mental health.
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