Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have differing views with regard to the question of what is the best way for
children
to spend their time. In my view, though it might
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more entertaining for
children
to watch shows or play video
games
, reading
books
is a much better option. It is true that tv episodes or computer
games
are more attractive with vivid visual
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and astonishing sound
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.
However
,
children
would easily lose
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in pursuing academic performance because it is too easy to
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time in them. Even worse, studies show that
children
who play competitive
games
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games
, tend to become more aggressive towards others. It means youngsters might have wrong attitudes towards the world and lack appropriate social skills, which play important roles in their adulthood and future career.
On the contrary
, reading physical
books
have various positive impacts on
children
.
First
of all, reading stories book cultivates
children
’s linguistic skills which
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crucial for their academic performance.
Children
will be able to learn new vocabulary, grammar and even how to composite sentences by readying.
Secondly
, students gain much more comprehensive knowledge about a certain subject
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digital media tends to boost people’s attention with the most catchy point without
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explanation.
Finally
,
children
tend to learn faster and remember things more clearly with
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distractions when
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hardcopy
books
. It is difficult even for adults to stay
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, and it would be worse for
children
who have less self-control. Compared with staring at digital screens with notifications popping up all over the place, holding a physical book makes concentration much easier.
As a result
,
children
can put all their attention
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the content itself. To conclude, there are more benefits for
children
to spend time
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reading
books
rather than watching tv or playing digital
games
. It would be beneficial to take active measures to encourage
children
to read more.
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