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Most people prefer ready to eat food rather than homemade food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Nowadays, most people prefer to eat fast
food
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 rather than
self-cooked
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a self-cooked
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 meal. In my opinion, the drawback of
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 trend outweigh the benefits, and I will explain my reasons below.
To begin
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 with, ready-to-eat
food
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 lacks nutrition and almost all of these meals are not healthy. Eating too much fast
food
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 could harm our bodies and lead to complex health problems
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 as obesity,
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diabetes, and cancer.
Furthermore
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, we could not ensure the cleanliness and hygiene of foods.
On the other hand
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, by eating homemade
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, we could choose healthy ingredients and get balanced nutrition. Homemade
food
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 contains less harmful ingredients too, we
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 can control the percentage of sugar, calory and even
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 MGS level.
Moreover
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, the taste of homemade
food
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 is usually more suitable to our taste, because fast
food
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 in general just
serve
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the
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a
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 simple menu
such
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 as
burger
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a burger
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 or french fries.
In addition
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,
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a
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 self-cooked meal is can have more variation than a meal in a fast
food
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 restaurant.
Secondly
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, even though fast
food
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 can be prepared very easily, the price is usually higher than self-cooked meals. Lower-middle-income people usually could not afford fast
food
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. Because eating at a restaurant frequently would cost a large amount and that would be pretty tough for low-wage earners.
As a result
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, preparing and eating
food
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 at home can be more economic, especially for a family. In conclusion, the disadvantages of eating ready-to-eat
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 outweigh the benefits.
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, people should be mindful of eating fast
food
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 and avoid being to addicted it.
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