In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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the advancement of technologies, network
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is going to boost day by day.People are
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forced to
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their day
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sitting on the net,
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socializing,
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new information which
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given in blogs.They are
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matter and by drawing some conclusions.
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and
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respectively.
Firstly
,since new products are introduced to the citizens,juveniles can not understand or
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of their vitality.Which leads to
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unnecessary things not knowing them.For
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why that the leaders of corporations must post a load of funding on posting adverts
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supplying inner recipes,its perception and things like that.
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Furthermore
,it is a good way of showing their fame.
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always tends to purchase things they have never seen before,as the interest always leads people to taste unknown items.
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it is
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side that we are inhibiting
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there are
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of blogs,contents which shortly means that the citizens' budget is undoubtedly from
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of platforms.
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,these adverts have some drawbacks as they are so annoying from time to time.When individuals
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with watching videos or TV series in order to relieve stress after hard work,
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severe ads are
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more frequently.If
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shown up again it may distract one's mind,and it may not provide that it will increase the quantity of product.Reversely,it loses its productivity. To sum up,new products are essential to everyone to have a regard of having a satisfaction of living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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