Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Nowadays, adventurous
sports
like sky diving, bungee jumping, river rafting and many more are extremely popular. Some
people
believe that these types of
sports
should be banned by the government. I
completely
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against
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point
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of
views
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. Because these types of
sports
have
played
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with more precautions and
safety
.
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with ,
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dangerous
sports
have
high
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level of risk of serious injury and death.
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who attend that
sports
,
they
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should know in
details
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about
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. The authority that
conduct
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adventurous activities,
they
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give proper
guidence
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guidance
of
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on
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sports
and
also
provides training session by experts .
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, in
the
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sky diving every company provides
day
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before
training
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a training
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session, they teach how to jump in the air and what things would be carried.
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,
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authority
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authorities
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also
know
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about
people
's health reports and
also
prohibited those
people
who have
boold
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blood
pressure and heart disease.
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, in
the
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bungee jumping folks would
jumped
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in to
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high
altidue
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altitude
.So, it is very risky for
people
who have
such
health issues.
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, the government should provide high
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instead
of
banned
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. These days, there are available numerous
of
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highly
safety
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equipment .So , it
save
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a life who try
to
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these adventurous
sports
. Illustrate, in the sking,
sports
, slip on the zero
frition
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friction
ice ,
therefore
, required high
safety
equipment
such
as gloves , helmet and
gogals
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goggles
goals
to protecting our body. In conclusion, many
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have a dream of
try
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to
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sports
once in life. They
also
know about
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the risk
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risk
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risks
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of these activities and they
also
try on
own
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their own
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risk
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risks
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.
Hence
,
thegovernment
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the government
should try to
developed
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safety
factor
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factors
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insted
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instead
of
baning
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banning
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of
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apply
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dangerous
activites
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activities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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