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Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, adventurous
sports
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 like sky diving, bungee jumping, river rafting and many more are extremely popular. Some
people
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 believe that these types of
sports
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 should be banned by the government. I
completely
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am completely
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 against
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such
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the such
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a point
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point
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points
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 of
views
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. Because these types of
sports
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 have
played
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been played
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 with more precautions and
safety
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.
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the
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dangerous
sports
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 have
high
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a high
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 level of risk of serious injury and death.
People
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 who attend that
sports
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,
they
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apply
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should know in
details
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detail
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 about
activities
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the activities
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. The authority that
conduct
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conducts
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 adventurous activities,
they
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apply
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give proper
guidence
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guidance
of
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on
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sports
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 and
also
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 provides training session by experts .
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, in
the
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sky diving every company provides
day
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a day
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 before
training
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a training
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 session, they teach how to jump in the air and what things would be carried.
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,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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also
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know
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 about
people
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's health reports and
also
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 prohibited those
people
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 who have
boold
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blood
 pressure and heart disease.
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the
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bungee jumping folks would
jumped
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jump
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in to
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into
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 high
altidue
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altitude
.So, it is very risky for
people
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 who have
such
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 health issues.
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, the government should provide high
precaution
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precautions
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instead
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 of
banned
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banning
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. These days, there are available numerous
of
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highly
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safety
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safe
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 equipment .So , it
save
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 a life who try
to
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these adventurous
sports
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. Illustrate, in the sking,
sports
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, slip on the zero
frition
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friction
 ice ,
therefore
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, required high
safety
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 equipment
such
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 as gloves , helmet and
gogals
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goggles
goals
 to protecting our body. In conclusion, many
juvenile
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 have a dream of
try
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 to
adventures
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adventure
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sports
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 once in life. They
also
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 know about
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the risk
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risk
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risks
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 of these activities and they
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 try on
own
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their own
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risk
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risks
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.
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,
thegovernment
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the government
 should try to
developed
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develop
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safety
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factor
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factors
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insted
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instead
 of
baning
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banning
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of
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apply
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dangerous
activites
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activities
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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