If children behave badly should their parents take responsibility and also be punished? State your opinion.

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young people have been getting worse behaviour and their
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should be responsible
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their behave which has widespread
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in recent decades with many
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individuals
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it. I personally agree with the
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statement, and there are many compelling reasons to support my
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many
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are entering to
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because of incorrect upbringing or any kind of websites.
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contemporary
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keen on
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technologies
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taking
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as they play pugnacious games on smartphones. In
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statement
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do not blame the
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. Because they take upbringing from their
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and teachers. So their loved ones have to be well-behaved and gracious. And they should provide full of busy time of education rather than idleness. In current years many people prefer to earn money and make
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their
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. In most cases, it is
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system to
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behave.
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, not only the
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take bad behaviour but
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they will be
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in the future without
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parents
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responsibility. In
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statement their
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have to illustrate the correct
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they have to give
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. Because nothing else can repair their pity situation. It is true to advocate that
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parents
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should be accountable to their
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and to their upbringing. By
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of my conclusion,
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once again reaffirm my position that the
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take responsibility and
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be punished when the
children
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behave badly
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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