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In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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There is no doubt that these days there are a lot of companies and almost all of them claim that their
products
 are new and useful.
However
, there are advertisements claiming that they are the
first
 invention in the world. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the matter and give my opinion.
to begin
 with, when any
company
 said that they have new stuff they really attract some attention, because society like new things that they have never seen before.
in addition
, many of
company
 can not be able to imitation other
products
 or other logos and companies.
For instance
, there are companies that tried to imitate apple
company
 but they did not succeed.
however
, it is really hard to imitate other things or
products
 it needs many methods and smart advertising.
also
 creating new
products
 need a good idea. And to create good stuff the
company
 need to focus on what people need and want in their life. they need to ask many influencers to get new ideas and thoughts cuz it needs creative people. as we know nowadays social media affects people so much and can really convince them to buy or try new
products
. to sum up, if the
company
 want to imitate another
company
 or product they need to develop the stuff or they can not succeed. So we need to be creative and smart to do it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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