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Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in need. Others however prefer to give money to national and international charitable organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Doing
charity
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 by giving donations or in
kind
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 is always welcome.,
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 some
people
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 argue about How we should do
charity
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. their point of argument is that we should support the needy and poor in
kind
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 .Whereas some
people
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 argue that donating cash to a charitable organisation is the right way to do
charity
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. let's discuss both views and
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 I will give my opinion on the topic.
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 , The main purpose of
charity
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 is to help the needy and poor. So that they can be helped and their needs can be met.By doing philanthropy in
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 we get to know the plight of needy and poor
people
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.
People
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 will be understood how their actions impact needy
people
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's lives. Providing help directly to needy
people
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 realises the graveness of problems faced by the poor .
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 in countries like India
people
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 always donate used winter clothes to poor
people
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 in the winter season. poor
people
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 get benefited from
this
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 gesture.
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 , If some
people
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 are donating
money
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 to help a
charity
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 organisation that provides basic amenities to poor
people
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 is
also
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 considered great help. If
money
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 is getting donated
then
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 a large section of poor
people
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 gets benefitted at a single point in time.
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 By raising
money
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charity
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 organisations can reach more needy
people
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 . For ,instance In Countries like the USA , churches provide shelter to homeless
people
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 in the winter season for night stay.
This
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 shelter initiative is funded by donors who gives a large sum of
money
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 to philanthropy organisation affiliated with churches. In conclusion, Doing
charity
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 is great
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work and by providing monetary support
Charity
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 organisations can reach more
people
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 in need . Whereas
charity
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 in
kind
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 demands the time of the individual. So
people
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 cannot devote time to philanthropy activities because of their professional commitments. So I am of opinion that
people
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 do
charity
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 by doing monetary contributions to national and international
charity
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 organisations,
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