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what are the advantages and dis advantages of living in rural area?

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Without
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doubt
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 living
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a
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countryside
 brings great benefits. But I would probably say that the most evident would be that rural areas boast a lot of
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the beaten
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 in which people can find peace.
This
 is obviously a major plus point since people escape the crowds and built-up areas to enjoy an uninterrupted view
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from
hectic
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 Pace.
Moreover
, a
second
 benefit might be that
countryside
 see a decrease in crime.
This
 is surely a valuable merit which is the result of
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 population which
know
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 each other very well.
In other words
,
neighbour
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a neighbour
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 could be someone on whom you totally rely.
However
, living in
countryside
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also
 have
clear
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 drawback. One of
bad
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 points that really stands out is that
countryside
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the countryside
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 could be a place
where
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 doesn't have
night-life
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 and there is nothing to do . So people might get bored rigid too easily, which has
direct
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 effect on life satisfaction. As well as
this
, another major downside would be lack of
frastructure
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infrastructure
such
 as reliable public transportation which speeds up the process of doing things which Can result in doing more activities in a day.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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