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Internet is important part of life ?Are you agree or not agree explain this.

#internet #part #life
The use of
Internet
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 is widely known nowadays. Everyone cannot live without
internet
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an internet
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 connection. It
such
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 a big help for people who are working abroad and
also
 with their jobs or businesses. We will discuss in
this
 essay how important
internet
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the internet
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in
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 human life.
First
 of all, most
of
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the
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people choose to work abroad. Because
most
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 company offers them much better income and opportunity. For
exmaple
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example
, professionals. Other countries
offers
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more
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greener pasture and upgraded equipment which can help them grow in their
carreers
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careers
 and gain more knowledge. And with
this
 situation,
internet
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 has
big
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a big
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 contribution for them to stay connected to their
loveones
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loved ones
love ones
 back
to
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 their homeland.
Secondly
, online shops
is
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 popular globally. And without
internet
access
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,access
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 they cannot post or sell their products.
That is
 why having
internet
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 connection is a must for everyone working remotely. And at the same time, because of the recent
pandemic
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,pandemic
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 we had
experience
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. Most of us
are
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work from home. And we cannot deny that without the
internet
 people might not able to have income
if
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they have
this
 kind of job. In my opinion,
internet
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the internet
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 before is not necessary
with
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in
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 our daily
living
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. But because of
upgeraded
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upgraded
 technology right now, we can almost do or finish our job through
internet
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the internet
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 and connected to our family easily.
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