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At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

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In modern times, the issue of young adult quantity is high in a few countries rather than in old age groups. it is often said that there has some advantages to having a large number of young
people
 ,
however
, others believe that there are some negative effects if the older
people
 percentage is going to high.From my perspective, there are some pros to
this
 situation than cons, as I will outline below. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why the public believes that young adults have lots of stamina.
Firstly
, young blood can produce fast results, which can be beneficial to any company. To be precise, fast processing can make humans healthier, more skilled and developed etc.
Secondly
, Youngblood changes their nations fast.
This
 is because folks who are young always have the latest knowledge which can help to develop a country with advanced technology as well as grow GDP. Despite these arguments, there is
also
 a case for the idea that can be faced some disadvantages because of having a huge amount of older public. Perhaps the main reason old
people
's brains do not have much ability to understand or process work.
For example
, after 60 age groups
people
 are likely to forget the most important things that need to be done before and mistakes occur usually.
Further
, they can't work for a long period for one day.
As a result
, they need always some rest while working for any kind of illness. In conclusion, it is a topic which is very relevant to the modern world. That said, I feel that youngsters can change every country's image with the proper knowledge and skills rather than have a gigantic older crowd.
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