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As a result of tourism and increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights. What problem does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

#tourism #people #demand #flights #environment #measures
In
21st
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 century,
air
trasnport
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transport
 is the fastest way to visit anywhere
on
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in
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this
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the
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 world. The request
of
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for
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 more
flights
are
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 increasing day by day which has
very
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a very
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 bad impact on the whole
enviornment
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environment
 of
earth
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the earth
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 like
,
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apply
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 global warming,
air
pollution
, consumption of fuel,
noise
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and noise
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pollution
.
Therefore
,
necessery
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necessary
 steps should be taken to solve
this
 issue.
First
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 thing that comes
in
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 my mind is global warming. People visit
diffrent
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different
 parts of the world for their
vactions
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vacations
actions
vacation
, business tours and to see
beauty
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the beauty
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 of
nature
 which
ehance
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enhance
a
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the
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 demand
of
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for
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flights
.
This
 growth of
air
 transportation
increase
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increases
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air
pollution
 which badly
effects
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affects
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the
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apply
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nature
 and
damage
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damages
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layer of
earth
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the earth
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 which
results
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inresults
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 global
warmimg
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warming
. Due to global
warming
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,warming
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 climate is changing so rapidly.
Moreover
,
flights
produces
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produce
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 so loud noises which
contributes
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contribute
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in
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to
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the
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noise
pollution
. Apart from
this
, more fuel is required to use
air
transporation
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transportation
.
Hence
, layers of
earth
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the earth
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has
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 been destroyed to take out fuel. In
this
way
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,way
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 humans are vanishing
nature
 as well as natural resources. The most important step that can help to resolve
this
 problem is
growth
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the growth
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 of more trees. Government should make
organistations
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organisations
 that will protect the
enviornment
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environment
 by growing more trees and
limited
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flights
 should be allowed in a day.
Besides
, people should be aware
reagarding
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regarding
nature
 preservation that will not only protects flora but
also
 natural resources.
Furthermore
, authorities should put
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a limitation
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limitation
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limitations
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 on tourism by understanding the value of flora and fauna. In the conclusion, people should get
awareness
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regarding
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of
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the
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mother
nature
. They should decrease their travelling possessions
otherwise
, it will be difficult to control the situation in coming years and centuries.
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