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As a result of tourism and increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights. What problem does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Nowadays, people usually take
flights
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 to go from one place to another ,while
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 recent trend has probably certain
problems
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such
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 as expensive plane tickets and
transmission
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the transmission
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 of several diseases .
However
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 , these
problems
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 can be solved
out
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by effective measures.
To begin
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 with
discussion
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 about various issues happening from excessive use of planes to visiting non-native tourist places .
Firstly
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,
the
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flight
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 tickets become costlier if more people want to
travel
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 to other sites .
As a result
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 , some individuals who
have
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do have
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 not sufficient financial background are unable to visit their countries in case of emergency.
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 ,
travel
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 by plane from India to Canada is so expensive because a large number of individuals are moving to
this
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 nation every six months .
Secondly
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 , as different
countries
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countries'
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citizen
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citizens
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travel
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 together
in
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on
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 one
flight
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 so , they can transmit the illness to other travellers
also
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 .
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 , Covid-19 spread widely across many countries because of infection transmission during
travel
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.
Therefore
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, these above two mentioned
problems
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 are linked to unlimited
travel
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 by
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flights
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flight
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.
However
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, there are some solutions to solve above- mentioned complications.
First
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 of all, high authorities should oppose the idea of raising
charges
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the charges
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of
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for
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 air tickets . There should be
a
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apply
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fixed ticket
prices
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price
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 each year
instead
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 of any modifications.
Secondary
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 solution is that distinct citizens must go through all body tests before
departure
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the departure
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 of
flights
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 in order to check their poor immunity and restrict them to take
flights
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 on spot.
In addition
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 to
this
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 ,
migrant
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migrants
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 have to wait until
his
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or
her
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their
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 medical report is totally perfect . In conclusion, there are some
problems
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such
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 as
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the
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distribution of
virus
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viruses
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 all around and escalating
flight
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 expenses whereas these issues can be mitigated by conducting physical
check-up
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check-ups
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 and
the
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constant
flight
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 expenditures.
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