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As a result of tourism and increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights. What problem does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Nowadays, people usually take
flights
 to go from one place to another ,while
this
 recent trend has probably certain
problems
such
 as expensive plane tickets and
transmission
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the transmission
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 of several diseases .
However
 , these
problems
 can be solved
out
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by effective measures.
To begin
 with
discussion
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 about various issues happening from excessive use of planes to visiting non-native tourist places .
Firstly
,
the
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flight
 tickets become costlier if more people want to
travel
 to other sites .
As a result
 , some individuals who
have
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do have
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 not sufficient financial background are unable to visit their countries in case of emergency.
For instance
 ,
travel
 by plane from India to Canada is so expensive because a large number of individuals are moving to
this
 nation every six months .
Secondly
 , as different
countries
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countries'
country's
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citizen
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citizens
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travel
 together
in
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on
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 one
flight
 so , they can transmit the illness to other travellers
also
 .
For instance
 , Covid-19 spread widely across many countries because of infection transmission during
travel
.
Therefore
, these above two mentioned
problems
 are linked to unlimited
travel
 by
flights
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flight
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.
However
, there are some solutions to solve above- mentioned complications.
First
 of all, high authorities should oppose the idea of raising
charges
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the charges
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of
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 air tickets . There should be
a
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fixed ticket
prices
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price
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 each year
instead
 of any modifications.
Secondary
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 solution is that distinct citizens must go through all body tests before
departure
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the departure
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 of
flights
 in order to check their poor immunity and restrict them to take
flights
 on spot.
In addition
 to
this
 ,
migrant
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migrants
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 have to wait until
his
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or
her
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their
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 medical report is totally perfect . In conclusion, there are some
problems
such
 as
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the
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distribution of
virus
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viruses
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 all around and escalating
flight
 expenses whereas these issues can be mitigated by conducting physical
check-up
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check-ups
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 and
the
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apply
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constant
flight
 expenditures.
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