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Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why

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In our modern time,
education
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 is the most important, I totally agree that all people should obtain the opportunity to access
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education
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 but
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students
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 who are not good at studies are not
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join
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 the university There are many reasons why higher
education
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 should be available for all admission.
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, the most important thing is that
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students
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 do not mean they can not
study
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 well.
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, if they allow only good
pupils
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 that are not equal to other people who want to join the university
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 as the
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 who
study
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 well but used to have bad grades when they were studying at high school and if they are not allowed to attend an academy that can lead to lack of qualified personnel.
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, not only good
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 can follow the curriculum of higher-level
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 but
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another person
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. In fact,
students
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 who have determination are
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 able to make it at a slower pace.
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,
pupils
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 who have a strong passion to
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 to follow their dream can try to
study
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 hard until they gain a good result.
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, good
students
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 can improve their academic results easier.
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 of all, good
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 are able to learn well and it is easy for teachers to teach them.
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,After that, teens can take part in major field proficiency and teachers allow
students
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 to work on
study
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 in detail.
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, it has high competition in their class but it will bring good results in the future as
students
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 who are good at sciences will improve technology better.
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, intelligent
pupils
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 will help to create good outcomes.
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