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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I partly agree. In my opinion, people reading books could have more benefits in
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 abilities than watching
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 shows, but watching the shows and movies could have a better development in
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. To support
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 essay. The reason why the readers could have better
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 skills is that the written words in books are more artistic than the
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 shows which contain more spoken languages.
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, the novel, Three Days To See, written by Helen Keller uses a lot of beautiful rhetoric and literary sentences to
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 an immersive and pleasant reading atmosphere for readers. By reading a
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 number of literature, book lovers would have more vocabularies to express their thoughts than other people.
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, literature or novels could be more helpful for
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 development, but not affect well in
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 Comparing serial dramas or movies with sci-fi fiction, the fiction would develop the lesser of fancy ideas as there are no pictures.
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, sci-fi films could provide more creative thoughts to the audiences.
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, in the Avatar movie, the contents of the film are all created by its director. The audiences could be amazed by these fantastically designed creatures, and these scenes could able to stimulate the viewers’ mind development to let them have a creative
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. In conclusion, I believe both reading books and watching
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 are good ways to obtain better
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 abilities or spark viewers’ minds but reading could be more helpful in the
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 field and the
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 series or films are more efficient
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 of the audience.
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