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It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives, and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages and disadvantages?

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Owing to Fast development in every aspect of
life
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,
people
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 take danger in their, professional lives, and their personal
life
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. According to me, they lost their job and a good flow of
life
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 due to
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;
this
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 has more disadvantages than advantages.
First
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 and foremost, some
people
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 believe that taking challenges in
life
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 makes the venture. To be more precise, they face difficulties that are useful in their
further
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life
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.
Moreover
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, some flocks change their job frequently because they want to load of experience in
life
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 but it has a negative
impact
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 on their lifestyle
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 is a financial burden, emotional burden and mental burden as well.
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, in their personal
life
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, they take steps like a live-in separate from their families, which lead to either isolation or loneliness among communities. Taking a risk for ordinary
people
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, how bad
impact
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, and in rare circumstances , some individuals commit suicide due to mental pressure.
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, some individual thinks that taking a risk in
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 is not only just fun but
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 make them cool dude in front of others. Apart from
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 if someone does not take a risk, they would not enjoy
life
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 properly.
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, in America; there is a common trait that children leave their homes at the age of 18 , and the more experience, they get, while surviving alone makes them strong
people
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 who face all the challenges of
life
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. Resultingly it makes them confident, challenging, and strong
people
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.
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 it had a good
impact
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 on human psychology. In conclusion, it is beneficial to take risks in
life
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 and has many benefits for the personality of a person, but do not overlook the bad
impact
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 on
people
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's mental and emotional health, which is a serious phenomenon in the era.
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