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It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agree with this view?

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The number of senior citizens has been increasing all over the world in the past few years. It is often believed that
retirement
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 is the day that
people
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 can enjoy their freedom after many busy years. In my opinion, it seems that
people
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 will not be able to enjoy freedom after their
retirement
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.
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, many elderly
people
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 might not be in a good physical condition where they can enjoy outdoor activities compared to their prime ages.
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, a person who loves gardening at a younger age might not be able to complete the tasks without the help of others.
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, some
people
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 have to spend their life with sicknesses they get due to their unhealthy lifestyle at younger ages. As well as, some might have to support their children who are not settled well and dealing with problems while others have to look after their grandkids though they do not have an interest in it.
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, there are some
people
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 who experience a lonesome era without having access to visit their friends and family members.
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, it is not a contended season for
people
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 who do not have a proper
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 plan and wealth. In the contrast, there are many elderly
people
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 who spend their days happily after
retirement
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.
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, it seems that
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 is something that we need to plan in order to live a hassle-free life in the later part of our life. In conclusion, it appears that everybody does not have the same privilege to have a happy
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.
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