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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future, all vehicles will not be used as much as before,
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people
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 will travel like a passenger.
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automatic vehicles will be increased significantly, which will change considerably our society.
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 these modifications will lead to some misunderstandings between
people
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 who are used to
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 we’ll have more advantages. Nowadays, the automatic system is implemented more often in our lives. Even a big
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 of cars, buses and trucks have several automatic functions. We might see a lot of drunk, tired drivers who don’t obey traffic laws,
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 old
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 who don’t have a proper reaction to an obstacle. All of these
people
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 can make accidents, which can lead to an emotional impact
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 our lives. So, the desire to change the driver into a robotic one
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 will decrease noticeably traffic jams, and accidents. Meanwhile, several business companies would not need to hire drivers to transport their products
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another countries
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, because the automatic pilot will be able to achieve
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 the prices for these types of cars would be enough high, the government should have helped
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 to buy.
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, the old vehicle can be changed to a new automatic one, and to pay extra money for a period of time. Due to that changes, a big
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 of drivers who
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 used to
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 will disagree, because automatic vehicles can break down faster, and repair services might be very expensive.
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, it might be necessary for
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well-skilled
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 who are able to repair these. So, it might be only one or
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 services in the whole country, which make the way more difficult.
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, the advantages of
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 will outweigh a lot of disadvantages, because our lives are much more important than a car. The
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 of accidents will remarkably decrease, and
people
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 will not be afraid anymore to walk on the streets or
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 by
a
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car or bus. In a nutshell, the automatic system is the key
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 our success, so we need to improve it and
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make it perfect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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