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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the future,
the
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printed newspapers or
books
 will not be bought by people, because everything will be shared online by
internet
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the internet
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 without being
payed
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.
This
 essay agrees with the statement
,
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 because everything becomes digitalized and
the
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access to
the
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information becomes easier than in the past. Now it is no need to buy a
book
,
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 because you can read it from your software.
The technology
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 is being increased
by
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the
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time and due to the internet, we can access whatever we want and
to
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develop ourselves. The information is not restricted and we can download and read a
lot
 of
books
 without carrying them. Now it’s no need to buy a
lot
 of
books
, which take
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lot
 of space.
Also
, they are heavy to carry. So, due to an adequate device, you can resolve
this
 problem, by putting all your
books
 in the device and
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it
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 where you want.
For example
, at school children have a
lot
 of
disciplines
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, which involves a
lot
 of
books
, which are too heavy.
Also
, when you read a newspaper or a
book
, you need to adjust the luminosity. A smartphone can resolve
this
 problem by
configurating
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configuring
 it. The bad thing is that
by
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a gadget is losing the reality to hold a
book
,
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 and the smell of a new or an old
book
. A collection of
books
 can improve the design of your home, by adding new shelves.
Also
, the read
books
 can be offered to your descendants. The cover of a
book
 changes
the
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 whole meaning of it, making
more
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 interesting. In summary, it is good to use our gadgets for reading newspapers or
books
, because we protect our environment by saving a
lot
 of trees, but
also
 a real
book
 can make us happier
,
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 because it’s preserved the touch
sense
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, which is so important for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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