Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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are compelled to effort so they don’t have free time to take responsibility for their

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play an important role in a child's upbringing, while others think that babysitting centres are the best choice. I will discuss these both views and

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believe that

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centres are better than

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On the one hand, some people think that when

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go into industry, family members

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should be allowed to take

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of offspring at home. Because they think that

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are old and retired so that they will have lots of free time to look after their

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without money request but it will reduce their health day by day.

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are experienced in taking

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can go to task without having to worry about their

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take

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of infants.

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homes while

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spend time working.

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is different from looking after them so it needs to be planned and organized which can be given by experts in the

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can be taught some basic soft skills and practice that can improve their thinking và solve problems. To conclude, though some people think that kids should be cared for by

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I believe that

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centres are the best way for

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to give while they go to struggle so they can feel assured.

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