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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and ilegal drugs, and at an early age, some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the cause and effects of widespread drug abuse by young people. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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In the
last
 few years,
drug
 abuse has been spread by young
people
,
however
, some of them believe that
parents
 play a major role in setting a bad example for their children. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the perhaps causes of widespread
drug
 abuse and figure out a solution as well.
First
 of all, there are two kinds of drugs, legal and illegal, legal drugs are used based on the medical description and they are legislated to benefit the patient,
on the other hand
, some addicts use illegal pills in order to be
subconscious
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 and not feel the pain. Despite all the illegal drugs merits, it constitutes harm and danger to human health. Sadly, some
people
 are using these pills based on habits, their family members do it all the time, in fact, a lot of youth
people
 copy their
parents
' actions, even though their
parents
 do not set a good example, constantly being around
drug
 addict could possibly lead you to the same direction.
Nevertheless
, the solution to solve
this
 problem is by educating
people
 about the dangerous effects it may cause, or especially educating
parents
, they are responsible for building a healthy atmosphere at home so they should be aware of the significance of preserving their health, whatever method they are going to, their children will follow them. The government should step up to fix
this
 situation, perhaps by building more rehabilitation centres, and providing therapy sessions and supportive committees as well. In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe that all of us should try as hard as we can to prevent
drug
 abuse from widespread in the
next
 generation.
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