Some people prefer to provide direct help and support to those in local communities. Others, however, prefer to donate money to national and international charitable organizations.
People
have different opinions about the ways to support those who need help; two of which are direct help, offering help and support in the local communities, and indirect ones, taking the form of donating money
to charitable organizations
. Although
there are some benefits to indirect assistance, I still believe it is better to provide help directly.
Some argue that it is advantageous to donate money
to charitable organizations
because they believe that the money
donated to organizations
like such
could be effectively utilized for helping others
. Such
effectiveness is exhibited through the scale of the charitable organization
, meaning that the more established it is, the more competent it seems at helping those in need; there are
more cumulated wealth in the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
organization
that could be useful for operating charitable deeds, such
as hiring those who know how to help others
and being able to purchase resources that are necessary for those in need. Therefore
, because of the sheer scale of the organization
, those in need would turn to it for help, and people
who wish to donate but do not have a good understand
of how charity works would Change the form of the verb
understanding
also
turn to such
entity
and donate Correct article usage
an entity
money
there. This
kind of credibility based on its size encourages people
to donate money
to these kinds of charitable organizations
in hope that they would maximize the potential of the donation in helping others
.
Others
, me
included, Correct pronoun usage
myself
however
, hold the opposite view of the argument mentioned above because there might be corruption and under-the-table deals involved with the money
donated within a large charitable organization
and thus
impede the effectiveness or even defeats the purpose of the donation. Some people
could not help but harbor
some suspicion Change the spelling
harbour
to
the possibility of whether corruption could occur over the process of passing Change preposition
about
money
from one intermediary to another; even if the intermediaries are somewhat reliable, just how soon this
money
could reach those in need and whether those in need actually want financial assistance or some other forms of support are questions waiting to be answered. Thus
, with these doubts in mind, people
would consider making direct
Add an article
a direct
contribution
to those in the local community as the least Fix the agreement mistake
contributions
worst
option and would gladly do so just to avoid any risks that might be involved in donating to Change the adjective
bad
large
Correct article usage
a large
organization
. Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
Therefore
, it is this
kind of prudent attitude towards those who yearn for help that dissuades the
donors from donating Correct article usage
apply
money
to large organizations
.
To conclude, smaller charitable organizations
are preferred, seeing as how the possibility for
corruption I have mentioned in the previous paragraph is inevitable. The ability to critically think about the risks involved and not have blind faith in large charitable Change preposition
of
organizations
are
a must. It is imperative that before choosing which Change the verb form
is
organization
to donate in
, transparency is a key indicator that shows that Change preposition
to
this
organization
is to be trusted.Submitted by 598528510 on
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