You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country.You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

Dear Sir or Madam, On June 17, 2022, I and my family came to your country for living in rented accommodation . At the beginning of our living here we were glad to

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accommodation condition. After two days,I saw that your furniture condition old and invalid . The leg of one table was broken .

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why

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accommodation is not a satisfactory condition of the furniture I asked you to change it for a new one . Now I am afraid that I have to ask you to change it again .

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table is in our kitchen. We can not put everything on top of it. The table legs have an unpleasant sound if we put something on it and its legs are barely standing. In the instruction booklet,you have not mentioned

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defect nor have you told the user how to solve the problem . Please change it with a new one and does not have a problem . I hope you will resolve the matter to our satisfaction. Yours faithfully, Munisa Khamraeva Khamraev Munisa

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Jan 7, 2023

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

180 words

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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country.You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

Fully explain your ideas

Most people have forgotten the meaning behind the traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadyas only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

people say that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see artwork and historical objects by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?