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Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

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Dear Sir/ Madam, Seizing the opportunity and spurred by an ambition to make a challenging career in your reputed organization, I take
this
 opportunity to introduce myself as an aspirant for the post of
Landscape
 Architect. Sir, I am a
Landscape
 Architect with 06 years of work experience in
Landscape
 Architecture, designing, research, on-site execution, and site coordination. Currently, I am working as a
Landscape
 Consultant for Design & Planning cell, Delhi Jal Board, New Delhi. Not only I had been working in the capacity of
Landscape
 Architect Archohm, Noida earlier but
also
 had done an internship with Akshay Kaul & Associates.
Furthermore
, My previous work experience has familiarized me with many of the responsibilities and challenges related to the position. Working with Akshay Kaul & Associates give me a broader perspective to see
landscape
plan
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 beyond the recreational purpose. It basically helps to lead my perspective towards eco-sensitive design. In Archohm I basically worked more on commercial and institutional types of projects whereas in djb the projects were related to
restoration
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 and recreation of waterbodies and drains.
The
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 detailed resume & an overview of my work in
portfolio
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 is enclosed in my application. Given a chance to serve, I assure you that I shall do my best to prove myself an asset to your esteemed organization. Thank you for your time and consideration. Warm Regards, Madhu Rana
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