In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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is always entertaining whether it is inside our homeland or abroad. I completely disagree that more people will tend to spend their holidays in their countries rather than visiting a foreign country. Landing in
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has
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of benefits that overweigh the drawbacks. The experience, which is being somewhere where you try new food and learn
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culture, cannot be lived by spending vacations locally.
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the challenges that you may face
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makes
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you stronger and more responsible while having to deal with folks that do not speak or understand your language.
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was in Russia,
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had to use body language to be able to order food at
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restaurant. It was a funny situation but it made me more confident that
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am ready to do anything to survive where
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am. Inspiration is
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another benefit
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flying to a new land. There is no
one
country that has everything when it comes to history, nature, architecture and more. Every time you visit
one
of the famous capitals, you will get inspired by
one
of the
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that is
considered unseen for you anywhere else.
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, despite being
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, when
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visited UAE,
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was impressed by seeing
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khalifa as
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have never seen a building that tall before.
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of inspiration and creativity. In conclusion,
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believe that staying in
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drawbacks than advantages for people to consider it a choice to commit to in the future.
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the world will always be
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of inspiration and excitement for people who like to try different cuisines and know more about other traditions.
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