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The use of electronics has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#electronics #effect #relationships #people
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Mucormycosis
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 is rarely seen in healthy individuals and reported
cases
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 are scarce. But with
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 pandemic, there has been a surge in
cases
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. India witnessed its
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 severe wave in March 2021, and as of 7th June 2021, the Indian Ministry of Health recorded 28,252
cases
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 of
mucormycosis
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[3]. The
cases
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 during
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second
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 wave became so prominent that many state governments had to declare
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 too, as an epidemic. No case has been yet reported in the literature with initial gingival findings of
mucormycosis
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 in recovered patients of Covid-19 infection. In
this
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 paper, three
cases
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 of gingival/oral manifestations of
mucormycosis
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 are presented which were identified in their initial stage, along with a short review of
literature
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the literature
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of
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 gingival/periodontal
mucormycosis
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 before
pandemic
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the pandemic
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. Early diagnosis and timely treatment in these
cases
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 prevented aggressive radical surgical resection like partial/total maxillectomy, and orbital exenteration.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electronics
  • negative effect
  • personal relationships
  • screen time
  • face-to-face interaction
  • distraction
  • meaningful conversation
  • social media
  • false sense of connection
  • technology
  • lack of empathy
  • emotional depth
  • online interactions
  • misunderstandings
  • conflicts
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