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Some people think it is important to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on maintaining old ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The importance of old and new
buildings
 was always debatable and has now become more controversial. Some people think that preserving the old
buildings
 is a waste of money,
instead
 of
this
 new
buildings
 should be built. while others rejected
this
 notion. In my ,opinion the former preposition appears to be more rational.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate my views and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There is no denying, that it is appropriate keeping certain old
buildings
. Many castles and mansions,
for example
, around the World are of great interest and they deserve to be preserved, but in some cases, old
buildings
 are overrated, while, many new
buildings
 are undervalued.
Instead
 of money being spent on improving them, many old
buildings
 should have been demolished, because they are not fit for purpose. Many people like them for nostalgic reasons, and there is no doubt that they are symbols of another era, but they are in many instances not very practical to work or live in.
On the other hand
, new
buildings
 are generally cheaper to build and maintain than keeping old
buildings
. The cost involved in the latter arise because sometimes it is difficult to find the correct materials for renovation. It is
also
 time-consuming to modernise them while at the same time keeping the original features. Some people dislike modem construction methods because they use a lot of glass and steel rather than old-fashioned materials
such
 as bricks. As we have seen, the construction of modern
buildings
 is more worthwhile than maintaining older ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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