Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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of youngsters use their gadgets

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hours daily.

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development of

smartphones

might be a significant reason that children spend a

lot

of

time

. It could be a positive and

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negative development. Over

the

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time

, technology has

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increased considerably, by making a great jump

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their characteristics.

Smartphones

are like small computers, which have become a part of our lives. Due to them, we might realize everything, by

chating

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chatting

, using

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map

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, listening

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, taking photos, or playing amazing games. Their

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simplified everything in our daily life.

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, I have been using a mobile telephone for about 15 years

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now, and due to

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artificial

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intelligence

inteligence

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I achieved everything, even I got a job in another country. I'm on the fence with the

second

question, because if we use a

lot

of

time

staring

on

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our phones, we might be influenced

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negative

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by

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of communication between people, and the isolation from

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reality.

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, people who are using their phones plenty of

time

, become more inhibited and isolated from

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society.

Although

it's really hard to live without

smartphones

, we should invest

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our free

time

by hanging out with our friends and

chiling

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chilling

out.

Nevertheless

, we should try to explain to our children the benefits and

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drawbaks

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drawbacks

from

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a gadget, which can lead to many diseases. If people had spent

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more

time

with their friends, they wouldn't have had a

lot

of problems with their eyes. To summarize, the government should invest

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development

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of the

smartphones

, but we might understand the benefits, and

to

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use

properly

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for a good purpose. The bad side we should avoid, and not

to

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waste

time

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of

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doing nothing.