Some people like to work in company which offer high salaries, other prefer working in a company which offer good working atmosphere. What do you think. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are many leading software firms in the present generation. Even, other industries use different software databases to protect
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data. A lot of
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tend to
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in
company
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that offers huge salaries
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some prefer working that yields
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working atmosphere. In my opinion, I personally agree that everyone
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to
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with a company which offers
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bonus. On the one hand, each member is very enthusiastic to
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for an organization that paves to high increment in their career. For that
people
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have to gain experience individually step by step in knowing all
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loopholes
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, if any issue arises on solving them efficiently.
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, client data must be secured from a hacker with encryption keys
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of alphabets, numbers and special symbols that
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in google cloud azure.
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, becoming a team leader plays
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role in explaining various elements of a robotic project to new
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joiners
for
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attaining practical knowledge that gradually
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salary increment for them.
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, active learners are very zeal to
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in
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atmosphere with the help of others. They believe environmental conditions might contribute
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for them in what type of
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they are doing.
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, audience attention is on one person who is giving
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rather than a group presentation.
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to
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,
people
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who adopted to
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work
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with multiple persons will not lead
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success every time.
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, working in
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environment will give results but not effectively
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the mark. In conclusion,
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tend to
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individually in habituating a new skill which
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their
mind set
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mindset
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resulting in better career and high salary.
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, learning is an evolution that should be done as
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sole learner which leads to
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the target.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • advancement
  • sacrifice
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • employee well-being
  • team collaboration
  • innovation
  • retain
  • long-term career success
  • skilled workers
  • professional growth
  • work-life harmony
  • positive atmosphere
  • supportive culture
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