Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes .Some people say that personal lifestyle should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Environmental changes
such
as global warming
becomes
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the main cause, which puts the
earth
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life in danger according to the research
of
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Scientists. There are two opinions of people in which some thinks that its the duty of humans by changing
their
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daily lifestyle they can help to limit the cause of global warming while others things that
government
should take steps towards it. In my opinion,
its
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the duty of both
citizens
and
government
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the government
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to decline the
enviomental
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environmental
changes which
i
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will discuss in
following
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paragraphs. On the one hand, Individuals have
a
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opinion that by changing their own lifestyle , humans can contribute to
down
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the effects of environmental causes.
Firstly
, People can choose
three
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R's of
environment
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the environment
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, which are Reduce, Reuse and Recycle. They can reduce
the
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waste by
stop
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using plastic bags while shopping and can take their personal bags for
grocery
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groceries
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or for other purchases.
Citizens
can try to buy
the
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products which are made from recycled materials and reuse
by
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taking lunch for work or school in
a reusable plastic containers
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.
Moreover
, using the dustbin in
a
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correct way by putting all the garbage in the right dustbin as given instructions.
On the other hand
,
Government
should take some steps by which the effects of environmental causes can
be
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decline
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declined
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.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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can provide proper education in
school
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schools
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,
college
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colleges
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and universities about the
environmetal
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environmental
effects and conduct seminars for the
citizens
to give them proper knowledge.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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can use the method of reward and fine in which the citizen who
contribute
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to
save
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earth
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the earth
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will be rewarded whereas the individual who
seen
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not
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following the rules will be fined.
Lastly
,
government
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the government
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should put restrictions on factories
who
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that
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are damaging the
earth
and make special laws for them . In conclusion, It is the
the
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duty of both
citizens
and
government
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the government
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to save the
earth
by putting all their efforts and amending the laws
govern
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by the
government
because if
government
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the government
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makes the rules and people do not contribute to
it
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them
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then
the whole
compaign
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campaign
will be
unsuccessfull
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unsuccessful
successful
. So,
contribution
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the contribution
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of both is essential.
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