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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why this might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being sellf-employed?

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In the
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 few years, some people started to prefer a self-employed profession rather than working for a company or firm.
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, in
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 essay, I will illustrate the possible causes for
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 case and describe the pros and cons of it as well.
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 of all, the reason why self-emloyed is facing a huge turnout is mostly that some people are going through difficulties in managing between work and personal life,
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, parents are one of the most people who suffer, they have multi-tasking functions need to be done professionaly but
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 got parenting responsibilities too,
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, they tend to choose self-employed in order to have flexible jobs to fit their timetable.
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, working by themselves gives them freedom, not everyone likes a routine lifestyle, and it makes them feel obligated, which they probably hate. Despite the merits of
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 has a lot of drawbacks that we must see from all aspects. Working in a company or organisation helps you with developing your social skills,
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, boosting your self-confidence, which will probably make you will feel more comfortable in seizing opportunities and fulfilling leadership positions.
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, teamwork is a wonderful opportunity to improve your performance by sharing different perspectives between you and your colleagues,
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, you can all learn from each other, even after retirement it is beneficial too, it is great to have a lot of connections. In conclusion, the whole purpose of working in a job is to help you with building your career and accomplish a lot of achievements. Everyone should work wherever they are comfortable , in order to improve their standard of living and develop their productivity.
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