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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. With out the success of career, life will become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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I partly agree. In my opinion,
work
 is an essential thing in
people
’s lives, but
life
 would not be meaningless due to not succeeding in a career. There could have some other things making
people
’s lifetime complete. In human society, finding jobs is the thing that most individuals would do since they graduated from school. As
work
 is
people
’s income source, most workers are hustling for better positions in their jobs because the higher their success in their career, the better quality of
life
 they could have.
For example
, the salary of the medium or lower levels employees may only support their daily
life
.
By contrast
, managers or CEOs could gain more profits in their business and have a better quality of
life
.
Thus
,
work
 is an important thing
people
 need to have.
However
, without a successful career,
life
 could still have meaning for
people
. Not all
people
 are willing to put extra effort into their job, they believe other things in
life
 are
also
 important.
For instance
, cultivating their hobbies, using more time to accompany their family, or even experiencing different
life
 are making these individuals’
life
 happy. These
people
 may not have a high position in their occupations but compared with other peers who are more concentrated on
work
, they are more enjoy their
life
. In conclusion,
work
 is necessary for
people
 to survive in
this
 society, but could not be the only important thing into which they need to put enormous energy.
Nevertheless
, there are lots of things that could make a person’s
life
 become meaningful.
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