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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. With out the success of career, life will become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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I partly agree. In my opinion,
work
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 is an essential thing in
people
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’s lives, but
life
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 would not be meaningless due to not succeeding in a career. There could have some other things making
people
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’s lifetime complete. In human society, finding jobs is the thing that most individuals would do since they graduated from school. As
work
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 is
people
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’s income source, most workers are hustling for better positions in their jobs because the higher their success in their career, the better quality of
life
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 they could have.
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, the salary of the medium or lower levels employees may only support their daily
life
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.
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, managers or CEOs could gain more profits in their business and have a better quality of
life
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.
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,
work
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 is an important thing
people
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 need to have.
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, without a successful career,
life
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 could still have meaning for
people
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. Not all
people
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 are willing to put extra effort into their job, they believe other things in
life
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 are
also
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 important.
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, cultivating their hobbies, using more time to accompany their family, or even experiencing different
life
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 are making these individuals’
life
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 happy. These
people
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 may not have a high position in their occupations but compared with other peers who are more concentrated on
work
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, they are more enjoy their
life
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. In conclusion,
work
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 is necessary for
people
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 to survive in
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 society, but could not be the only important thing into which they need to put enormous energy.
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, there are lots of things that could make a person’s
life
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 become meaningful.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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