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It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Ue specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The knowledge could be taken both from the
books
 and the
experience
.
However
, nowadays probably it is more important to try to make as much
experience
 as possible.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why is more important makes
experience
throught
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through
throughout
thought
 life,
instead
 of reading
books
.
To begin
 with, we must keep in mind that
the
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books
 can’t contain always everything. When
scientist
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scientists
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,
archeologist
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archaeologist
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 and other
professionsts
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professionals
professions
 in
different
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field
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fields
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 make a
discover
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,
that is
 not due to the fact that they find
informations
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information
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 in
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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, but it is because they try to do experiments, so to use the previous
experience
 as something useful in the present. So usually ,in the scientific community, before something new is
learn
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, and
then
 it is written in
the
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books
.
Secondly
, it is important
keep
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 in mind that some type of knowledge is possible to learn only
living
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. It is not probable that in our lifetime we will read every book existing in the world, so making
experience
 is the only way that we have to understand,
for instance
, if a situation could be dangerous for
ourselves
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us
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. In fact, the
elderlies
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 usually can read better than
other
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others
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the
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about the
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 present political or economical situation, because probably in the past something similar could happen to them. In conclusion, even if without
books
 we would be lost, we don’t have to forget how much could be important the
experience
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