Obesity is becoming a major problem for kids and adults. What causes this problem and how to overcome it.

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Nowadays, weight gain is increasing at all ages, and because of ,

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there are so many problems among people.

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, the biggest problem of

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issue is apparently a lot of diseases among children and adults.

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, eating fast-food and unhealthy food causes to apprentice diabetes and for

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, the disease you should eat the drugs that cause more obesity.

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, some people are overweight because they stopped exercising.

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, My sister after migration could not continue their activity and causes increasing her weight and harming her health.

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, people should pay more attention to their diet and include exercise in their diets if they want to solve

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problem. I

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want to emphasize that kids and adults should pay closer attention to how they live and how they behave on a daily basis and eat.

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

143 words

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