Obesity is becoming a major problem for kids and adults. What causes this problem and how to overcome it.

Nowadays, weight gain is increasing at all ages, and because of ,
this
there are so many problems among people.
First
, the biggest problem of
this
issue is apparently a lot of diseases among children and adults.
For instance
, eating fast-food and unhealthy food causes to apprentice diabetes and for
this
, the disease you should eat the drugs that cause more obesity.
On the other hand
, some people are overweight because they stopped exercising.
For example
, My sister after migration could not continue their activity and causes increasing her weight and harming her health.
However
, people should pay more attention to their diet and include exercise in their diets if they want to solve
this
problem. I
finally
want to emphasize that kids and adults should pay closer attention to how they live and how they behave on a daily basis and eat.
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