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nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Uses specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare thanks to big companies that make all the ready for us the products.
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 change makes life easier for us. In fact, we can notice that people now have more
time
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 to dedicate to other activities. We can say
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 that now is safer than in the past to eat some type of food because the companies control the quality of it.
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 WITH, it is visible that these days families have more
time
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 to spend together. In fact, in the past preparing some kind of bread, for ,instance some sauces
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 as the ragù, requires a lot of
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. So, in the past,
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usually women had to spend a lot of their
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 in the kitchen
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 of staying with the rest of the family. Fortunately, today
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 the family structure is changed, but ,
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however
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 we have to notice that eating something good doesn’t require too much
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 because we can find the product in all the supermarkets. The result of
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 that more families have more
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 available.
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, it is
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 known that eating
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 seafood, now is safer. People can easily find it in almost every superstore and don’t worry about how much it is fresh because the markets have to control it before selling it.
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, considering these two reasons, we can say that thanks to technology, our way of life is improving more and more. Even if the system to produce food is not perfect,
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, on balance, we can say that we eat in a better way than in the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • pre-packaged meals
  • fast-paced
  • food technology
  • cooking appliances
  • healthy eating habits
  • traditional cooking skills
  • processed foods
  • preservatives
  • additives
  • culinary experimentation
  • meal kits
  • online recipe platforms
  • sophisticated dishes
  • smart kitchens
  • nutrition
  • balanced diet
  • food waste
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