Some children find some subjects example mathematics and philosophy difficult so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the
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curriculum
of school, there are some
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for
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juveniles which are compulsory like
mathmetics
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mathematics
or
philosophy
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. There are some debates about whether these
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subjects
subject
should be mandatory for
children
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or not because of their complexities. I personally agree with the situation because courses like
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and
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essential
to
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the education of
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.
Philosophy
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and Math are one of
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fundamental
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of
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and without attaining
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regarding these
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none
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anyone cannot be properly educated.
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, some youngsters
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these
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quite complex and difficult and
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to earn the
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of
philosophy
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and Math. But because of
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difficulty
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issues there is no way of making these
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optional as there are numerous ways of presenting these
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essential
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subjects
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to the students. I am not agreeing with
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statement.
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Mathematics
and
philosophy
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can open the window of
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in front of
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by which they can achieve cognitive
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, reasonable thinking and logic.
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, in the school
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these
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courses are often included to teach
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about
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these
two
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subjects
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. I personally believe that
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instead
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of
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eliminating
these
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from the
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syllabus
we can try to find out how we can make these complicated
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enjoyble
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enjoyable
and suitable for the age of
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.
For instance
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, there can be some puzzles or quizzes for students regarding math and
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by which students can be more interested in these
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subjects
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. In conclusion, I can come to the point that, every branch of
knowledge
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needs to be learned by
children
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whether it is easy or hard. The solution is we have to find out how we make the lesson appropriate for their age and as well as better for them.
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