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Q. Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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With the
COVID
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 a new platform to conduct our virtual meetings and lectures. To a great extent, I too believe giving lectures in auditoriums to
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audience
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 is an
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obsolete
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 at our disposal.
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However
, I still believe having lecture sessions in person
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 own benefits. In
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 view and provide my opinion too.
To begin
 with,
COVID
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 of increasing social
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 or
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meetings
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. In
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, if students gather in large
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 for any session in
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,
then
 the risk of spread
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COVID
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 as social distancing will not be observed effectively.
Secondly
, people will have to commute to
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 for the lectures eventually adding to
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 risk.
Thirdly
, while conducting
such
 sessions physical capacity of the auditoriums
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 so that there is
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 in seats available and
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 of
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students
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 coming. For eg, if
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 of students are more than the capacity of
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,
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 might not turn out to be successful as attendees might without proper seating arrangement
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not be comfortable . All the above problems stated above can be easily mitigated with online meetings as no physical presence is required and
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 will be successful as well.
On the other hand
, the only downside which I see to
this
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arrangement
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 of
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 or online gathering, you will not be able to evaluate the student's expression and
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 or might be doing some other activity in parallel to which presenter will not be aware. So in my conclusion, I would like to opine that , unless it is not imperative to have the meetings in person , it is always advisable to leverage the benefits of technology
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 to have
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balance and yield results which are
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beneficial
 to everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • in-person interaction
  • student engagement
  • multimedia tools
  • learning styles
  • blended learning
  • face-to-face sessions
  • interpersonal skills
  • access to technology
  • feelings of isolation
  • self-discipline
  • social skills
  • traditional classroom settings
  • educational accessibility
  • virtual classrooms
  • online platforms
  • technological advancements
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