Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while other think is unfair. Discuss both these of view and give your own opinion.

It
is believe
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that everyone who is the best
of
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sport
can have a good deal and earn a lot of
money
than other jobs. Some
adividuals
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individuals
think
this
is definitely reasonable, while other think
this
is not fair. In
this
essay,I will explain
at
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apply
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both points of view and will offer my own opinion at the conclusion. Some of the reasons that
variety
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a variety
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of
people
suppose that unfair.
First
of all, they might think the
moneys
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money
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which
pays
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pay
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for
professionals
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professional
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of
sport
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sports
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is too much and
people
should share
money
with charity or poor
persons
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people
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.
For example
, using a little bit
money
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of money
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for cancer
center
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centre
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treatment to help various patients.
Second
of all, They feel
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sportman
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sportsman
sportsmen
or
sportwomen
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sportswomen
sport women
who are received a lot of value than their dedication, whilst other
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majors
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dedicate a lot of
knowledges
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knowledge
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either but get low
money
.
On the other hand
, a small population community think that they appreciate how these
people
effort to
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be successful
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successful
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succeed
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. An example of
this
,
Ronaldo
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is Ronaldo
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who
get
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gets
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the big deal and
have
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has
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higher
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a higher
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of
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apply
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living than
almost
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most
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people
in
sport
major because he had been double efforted and strived
instead
of
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being lazy
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in the past. He even still hard
practicing
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practising
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until now,
although
He has been the best one.
In addition
, when these persons
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stand
the
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top of
profession
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their profession
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and have
luxury
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the luxury
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of living. They often give their
money
for
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to
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many charity
oganizations
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organizations
such
as
the
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orphanages and
low income
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low-income
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people
center
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centre
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to help them improve their life. In conclusion, I feel that those
who
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whom
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success
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succeed
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in
sport
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sports
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fied
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field
they should be acknowledgement and they appreciate that position. I really
impress
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impressed
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with them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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