Scientists and technologists are seems to be more valued in society than artists and muscians in what extent do you agree?

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It is said that scientists and
technologists
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provide more value to
sciety
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society
than
articts
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artists
and
musicians
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. I totally disagree with
this
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arguemt
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argument
.
Firstly
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, if the value that
scientsts
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scientists
,
technologists
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,
artists
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and
musicians
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serve to
sciety
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society
could be measured by the number of individuals who are saved by those professionals, there would not be
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between the value of scientists,
technologists
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and
artists
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and
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musicians'
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musicians
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. As everybody knows, thanks to the progress of science and technology, the
sciety
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society
city
has been progressing and
large
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a large
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number of
people
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's life has been changing more
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.
On the other hand
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,
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an enourmous
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enourmous
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enormous
number of
people
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are cured by
music
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and
arts
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created by
musicians
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and
artists
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. In my country,
for example
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, during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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of covid-19, some
musicians
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made tunes to encourage
people
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and they posted these
video
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videos
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via SNS. As a
results
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result
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, many
people
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were saved by
these
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this music
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music
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and they gained energy for struggling confused
wold
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world
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.
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, if there was no
music
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and no
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arts
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art
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in
this
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modern world,
these lack
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this lack
these lacks
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would affect
to
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apply
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the
evolutions
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evolution
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of science and technology.
Music
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and
arts
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are known as the essence which can grow
people
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's
conceptional
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and perceptional abilities up.
These
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ability is
essencial
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essential
for generating
inovations
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innovations
which change our life
better
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the better
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.
For instance
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, Shinya Yamanaka, one of the famous
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Japanese
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researcher
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researchers
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and
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who
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invented
super cell
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supercell
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for curing cancer, said that when he was a
children
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child
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, he tried to create some
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arts
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art
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, and he thought that
these
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this
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activity is the
fundation
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foundation
of his creativity. Had not
the
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for the
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existence of
music
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and
arts
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,
crucial
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the crucial
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cancer's
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cancer
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problem would have remained
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an as
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as
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a
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big issue.
In addition
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, many
musicians
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and
artists
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support the
continuos
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continuous
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of
music
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and art
caltures
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cultures
culture
captures
. In conclusion, I
reitarate
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reiterate
that
artists
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and
musicians
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and
artists
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should not be said as lower valuable professionals than scientists and
technologists
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.
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