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The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#punishment #students #schools #decline #behaviour
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In the modern era , schools are very important to get knowledge and become to be more successful in life . Some masses think the use of
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 in an institution must be stopped and it should be used to improve behaviour ,
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however
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 others are against
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 notion . I totally agree with the latter view and will discuss it in the upcoming paragraphs.
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, with the reasons for the formal view .
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 and foremost reason is that people believe if the
teachers
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 do not punish pupils
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 their children do not get any kind of injuries from their
teachers
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 which will not affect their studies .
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, many individuals believe if their child gets
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 the case of behaviour
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 their children become more mature about how to talk with elder people, so they never think to misbehave with others remind of the fear of
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 .
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, in the year , 2010 a survey was conducted by UNO which was indicating 55%
children
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 become more mature about respecting others with the help of
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 .
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 , if the
teachers
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 do not punish their students
then
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 how they can get fear
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a teacher
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maybe they
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fail to get a good education without school
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 which will affect their future
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Moreover
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 , sometimes pupils make a disturbance in the class which
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other students' studies and maybe those who make noise in the class
they
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fail to pass their class so to remember
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all these facts
teachers
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 must be punished to maintain rules and regulations.
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, in the year , 2015 many school results were good in percentage and they were rewarded by the government . In conclusion ,
teachers
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 should punish their students according to the mistakes they have done or did without giving them injuries .
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