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the resroration of old buidings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. this money would be better spent on new housing and road development .to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#resroration #buidings #cities #world #costs #amounts #money #road #development
The
renovation
 of old
buildings
 in main towns over the world is costly .
this
 expenditure can be invested
on
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in
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 new
buildings
 and infrastructure improvement
such
 as
road
 development. I
totaly
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totally
 agree with
this
 point of view
becouse
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because
effectiveness
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the effectiveness
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 of
renovation
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renovating
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old
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an old
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 building is
quectionable
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questionable
. Nowadays,the restoration of old
buildings
 in major cities has become a trend
instead
 of demolishing
becouse
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because
 some
people
 inspire
old
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the old
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 look of the cities.
however
 it
take
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takes
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place
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to place
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 a huge cost and time to
recration
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recreation
 of these
buidling
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building
buildings
 due to
requirement
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the requirement
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 of special technologies and materials,
althouth
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although
these buiding
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this buiding
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 are
resorated
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resorted
resonated
 by spending a huge amount of money , the
maintaing
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maintaining
main thing
 cost is
also
 higher than modern
buildnigs
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buildings
. the one reason for
that is
 many old
buildings
 need more
enegy
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energy
as old
achiolgical
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archaeological
 design are not comply with new technological items
such
 as ventilation . On the
othre
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other
other's
 hand, many
people
 in the world are suffering from
lack
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a lack
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 of housing and other
amenties
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amenities
. if the government can spend money to improve housing and
infrastucure
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infrastructure
people
's living stand can be improved .
Moreover
 ,
beveoping
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developing
road
 and other
infrasturecure
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infrastructure
has
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have
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 a great influence
of
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on
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ecomny
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economy
develoment
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development
.
For example
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building
builing
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,builing
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 a new
road
 to
countryside
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the countryside
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, Industries ,which are located in the country area, can get
profit
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a profit
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form
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from
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 product exporting . these advantages not only for the company but
aslo
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also
whole
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for whole
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 the country. In conclusion, despite
renovation
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the renovation
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 of old
buildnigs
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buildings
is
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being
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 costly, the effectiveness of
renovation
 is not considerable,
However
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,However
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 if
the
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apply
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this
 money spend on
road
 and housing
project
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projects
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, it helps to improve
people
 living stand and
economy
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the economy
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 of the country
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