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The resroration of old buidings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. this money would be better spent on new housing and road development .to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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The renovation of old
buildings
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 in major cities around the world is expensive. These expenditures would be  better invested in new housing and
infrastructure
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such
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 as road
development
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. I totally agree with
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 point of view because the effectiveness of renovating old
buildings
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 is relatively low. When these funds are invested in amenities, they help to improve
people
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's lives and the
country
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's economy. Nowadays, the restoration of old
buildings
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 in major cities  has become a trend
instead
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 of demolishing them. The primary cause of
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 phenomenon is that governments believe that old
buildings
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 can improve the appearance of cities and attract tourists.
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, rebuilding ancient
buildings
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 requires  special technologies and materials, and it is
also
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 a time-consuming process. Even though these
buildings
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 have been restored, their maintenance costs are higher than those of modern
buildings
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 because many old
buildings
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 require more energy because their old architectural designs are incompatible with new technological devices.
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, these structures require ongoing special treatment to protect them from harsh weather conditions.
thefore
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therefore
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, many
people
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 in the world are suffering from a lack of housing and other amenities. If the government can spend money to improve housing and
infrastructure
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,
people
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's living standards can be
improvednment
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improvement
improvements
 can spend money to improve housing and
infrastructure
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,
people
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's living standards can be improved.
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, the
development
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 of roads and other
infrastructure
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 has a significant impact on economic
development
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.
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, by constructing a new road to the countryside, industries in remote areas can profit from exporting their products, resulting in benefits not only for the company but
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 for the entire
country
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. To summarize, while
renovation
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the renovation
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 of old
buildings
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 is costly, the effectiveness of renovation can be low.
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, if the  money is spent on roads and housing projects, it helps to enhance
people
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's
life
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living
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 standards and the economy of the
country
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. in new housing  and
infrastructure
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such
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 as road
development
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. I totally agree with
this
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 point of view because the effectiveness of renovating old
buildings
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 is relatively low. When these funds are invested in amenities, they help to improve
people
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's lives and the
country
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's economy.
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