Men and women are different in term of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. Do you agree or disagree?

It certainly cannot be denied that
men
and
women
are different in
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of their references and capabilities.
Therefore
, some
jobs
are better done by
men
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men
and others by
women
. I definitely agree with
this
situation. The reasons
of
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this
are twofold.
First
and foremost, it is vitally important that nowadays, there are various types of
jobs
. Some of them are better done by
men
that
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construction,
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miner
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. Opposing to
this
other
jobs
are well done by
women
.
For instance
, taking care of children at
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or like babysitters.
Women
cannot do difficult, hard
works
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work
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and
men
cannot do work that
belong
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to
the
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women
. It is my belief that everyone should do work that
are
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suitable for
themselves
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them
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.
Secondly
and more importantly there are some
jobs
that cannot be
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them
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without
men
or
women
. One of them is
professional
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artist. Another
this
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kind of job is
singer
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a singer
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. We cannot imagine these occupations without
men
or ladies.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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need both genders of workers.
Ladies
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necessary to clean,
cooking
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and cooking
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as
employeers
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employers
employees
. Of course, ladies cannot be
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butchers
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or construction
worker
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workers
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,
however
, some
women
work as skilled-craftsman by force.
This
is a sorrowful situation
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the world.
Furthermore
, our country
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to multiply our homeland with workers
such
as businessmen and
employeers
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employers
employees
. By way of my conclusion, I believe that
this
issue is likely to become even more important in the future as
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the border
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border
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borders
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between countries become increasingly blurred. It,
therefore
, demands
out
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further
consideration.
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