Nowadays, people have developed poor eating habits and do not eat balanced diet. What are the reasons behind this? Suggest possible solutions to control this.

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Nowadays, many
population
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populations
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eat
more
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fast
meal
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meals
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and do not like to eat
balanced
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menu and still do not do exercise in a
day
.Because
,
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this
reason makes most of the persons have obese.
However
, why do
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the community
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community
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communities
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enjoy eating poor cuisine and
have
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developed it in
this
way?
To begin
with,
this
has some reasons why the majority of
public
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the public
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prefer fast cuisine more than
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meal or balanced menu.
Firstly
, now many people are more occupied than before, and that makes society want to quickly eat meat and go find or work a job that he or she has because nowadays there are events and more things to do.
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, in the former
day
majority of society were free time than now, which made former people
have
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a moment to make diet
food
and exercise so,that make
food
culture
was not increase
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.
Secondly
,
this
reason is related to the
first
reason. Some
food
communities develop more fast
meal
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due to everyone needing more hours to do something that they want to do.
For instance
, when you have working now and will be sent in the
next
day
that will make you not have more time to eat good menu so, now fast cuisine is a good choice for you. In the
last
,
this
paragraph will demonstrate the best solution now.
This
solution is for the government to enact legislation for companies in the country to allow citizens to work no more than 8 hours per
day
and 48 hours per week. In conclusion,
population
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are eating poorer nutrition because occupied and development of the
food
communities and the solution is government to enact legislation to control companies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • poor eating habits
  • unhealthy food
  • fast food
  • convenience
  • advertising
  • nutrition
  • financial constraints
  • emotional eating
  • peer pressure
  • hectic work schedules
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • junk food
  • processed food
  • nutrient-rich
  • obesity
  • health consequences
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