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people's shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than on any other factor . to what extend do you agree or disagree

#people #habits #age #group #factor
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shopping
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 patterns of
people
is
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 depended
regarding
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their
aged
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age
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 rather than any other
curcumantance
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circumstance
. I completely agree with
this
 point of
veiw
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view
becouse
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because
people
's shipping methods and necceraties can be changed according to age group On the one hand , shopping habits
has
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 changed dramatically over a few
dacades
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decades
 due to
development
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the development
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 of technology and globalization.
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 of
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the advert
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advert
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adverts
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of
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on
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 mobile
device
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devices
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,
online
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the online
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 shopping
flatform
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platform
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 has become
most
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 popular among the young generation
becouse
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because
, new
gerneration
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generation
spents
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spent
spends
 more time on
internet
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the internet
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 and they are
more
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apply
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famillier
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familiar
 with
ecomernce
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e-commerce
eCommerce
app
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apps
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 on mobile devices.
Eventhough
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Even though
, online shopping is
convenience
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, many elderly
people
are prefer
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prefer
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 to go shopping
to
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in
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 physical
store
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stores
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 due to they might not be enjoying using
electronic
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an electronic
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device
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devices
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.
Moreover
, many older
people
 are more social
therefore
 they would like to communicate face to face when purchasing the item,
some time
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sometimes
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 it gives them
to
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 socialize with other
people
.
On the other hand
,
people
's needs and
frequncy
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frequency
 of shopping can be changed according to their age
grop
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group
. For
instantace
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instance
,
the
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teenager
probabaly
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probably
 likes to
shopping
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offten
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often
,
becouse
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because
the market has been
upadated
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updated
 daily with new items , particularly ,
electroic
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electronic
devicess
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devices
 and
also
adoloscent
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adolescent
adolescents
 spend
a
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huge money on smart devices
such
 as mobile phone and laptop.
beside
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, elder
people
 spend money on
house hold
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household
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itmes
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items
such
 as washing
machine
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machines
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and
refrigarator
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refrigerator
refrigerators
. In conclusion,
people
shoping
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shopping
habbits
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habits
is
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are
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technged
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changed
 according to their age group
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because
becouse
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because
 of
influence
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the influence
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 of technology and
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the differnece
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differences
differnece
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difference
of
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in
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 their needs
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