Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, almost every single online
media
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contains
advertisements
.
Advertisements
are becoming more and more
repetetive
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repetitive
, which is the reason why some
people
think that advertising is too common for us to notice the
product
. Others,
however
,
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state
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that advertising is still very effective at persuading
people
to buy their products. The reason why some
people
think we no longer pay attention to
advertisements
is
because
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it is annoying.
This
is true since every post on
instagram
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contains an advertisement on the
last
page, which makes the reader to be exposed to
repetetive
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repetitive
advertisements
.
Also
, there are inappropriate
advertisements
prevalent online. Which is harmful to adolescents.
This
leads to many
people
avoiding
advertisements
on purpose so that
what
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they are doing.
Moreover
, some paid
advertisements
trick the viewers to buy a particular
product
, who
then
would end up being
disapointed
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disappointed
and
annoied
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annoyed
by the actual products' quality.
Although
some
people
no longer pay attention to
advertisements
, there are reasons why companies still rely on
advertisements
for doubling
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their sales. Repetitive
advertisements
cause
people
buy
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the
product
based on
the
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copy cat
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copycat
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psychology. The results of
this
effect
maximizes
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when the
product
is advertised by a well-known celebrity.
For example
, a sportswear brand in Korea raised its
rete
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rate
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of Income by 200% after employing a famous Korean actor for the advertisement.
Similarily
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paid
advertisements
on youtube or
instagram
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can
also
result
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an increase in the number of buyers.
This
happens when
people
are given detailed information and reviews about the
product
. The customers can better trust the
product
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and will decide to afford the money. I believe that advertising is fairly successful at making profits in companies by persuading more
people
to buy their products. Advertising not only provides customers with information
,
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but
also
make
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them want to copy what others buy.
Therefore
I think advertisement is an effective business Strategy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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