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In today’s time the internet is making it easy to study online from home. Some people prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education. Discuss both views and share your opinion

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The internet is a wonderful thing.I remember,during my childhood,in order to write an essay,or to do a project,or to simply clarify a doubt,I had to put in a lot of effort.Going through books or asking out
people
 for help(the latter being unreliable) was a tedious task.Fast Forward to the present,we have the facility to access whatever we want,at our fingertips.Gaining knowledge about everything has never been
this
 easy.From the kings of the ancient greece to the most complex theories about the black hole,every dime of information is at a click's distance.
This
 has led to a group of
people
 inclining towards online
education
 rather than the traditional offline mode.If you ask me,I'd go with the traditional method anyday.I mean who doesn't like sitting along with a bunch of aspiring students,and studying something you've always been passionate about.Even though our society has developed big time since the past few years,some traditions need to be respected and abided.One
such
 tradition is classroom
education
.The advantages of classroom
education
 would outweigh the advantages of online method anyday.In
this
 generation,where the average attention span is very minimal,online
education
 is not so feasible as there would be no one monitoring us,unlike in classrooms.You might be fascinated about the subject you're studying,but the problem of procrastination is real.
People
 tend to delay their work,as there would be no one monitoring them.Accountability is something lacking in an online regime.What about the online live lectures you may ask,but there's always the option of turning your camera off and indulging in your own past-times.And
people
 should take note of the fact that the environment in which they study plays a major part in how they would perform.When you're sitting along with a bunch of students,you'd automatically feel the competion,which would fuel you,and make you push your limits.
Nevertheless
,online study has few advantages which shouldn't be overlooked.Since the internet is a powerful tool, you could always use it to learn extra skills required for your subject.If you had skipped an offline class unfortunately,you could always go back to your recorded live lectures.Final word, even though the internet is a powerful medium,it must be used as a tool,as a supplement,and we shall majorly rely on offline
education
 anyday.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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