Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and society as a whole. Whether or not,
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, is a moot point. I,
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, completely agree with the given assertion on the basis of climbing mental disorders and
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with, the main reason is that social platforms cause some mental illnesses. To put it another way, when someone
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some pics and videos which show an unreal sense of
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life, they
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, mental disorders would be gone up little by little. Comparing
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two life with using merely some pics could not
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result. Depression,
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platforms on individuals. Having said that,
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, increasing mental disorders is not the only
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to say,
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to going up social network influence, it is observed that a pic or clip could be
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immediately, and many users share that.
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, it will so difficult to distinguish the right from the fake. In fact,
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circumstance could be a real social crisis which nobody can foster. Some groups utilize
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aspect of modern
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to achieve their goals. In conclusion,
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there are many views on social network
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, my firm conviction is that they have
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on all people and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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